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Writing: Syntax — Basic example

Writing: Grammar

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a newly beach in Maui has black sand the sand is made up of ground lava instead of ground coral and shells so let's think about this so the way it read isn't is it horrible and I actually like breaking things up into into kind of smaller sentences that tends to just me kind of my style but it feels a little redundant your your you say on Onew Lee or on a loop on Olli I don't know the right way to pronounce it Beach and Maui has black sand and then you're saying the sand is made up of ground lava so it does feel like well you know we're just finished talking about the sand then you'd say the sand again so maybe a kind of a more elegant way would just to be kind of refer to this and maybe not even have another sentence so let's look at the other choices Oh Noli beach in Maui has black sand with the sand being made up of ground lava yeah that's you know they're they're kind of going in the direction that I'm implying but with the sand being made up it feels still redundant your said sand and then you're saying sand again so the beach in Maui has black sand and this sand is so once again you're using sand and sand it's kind of the same problem that you did up here sand and then you're immediately saying the sand again oh no on the beach in Maui has black sand which is made up of ground lava instead of ground coral and and shells yeah this one feels nice this one feels really good because you're not being you're not repeating the word sand over and over again unnecessarily we know you're talking about sand beach in Maui has black sand which is the second up here were before we corrected it the second sentence is referring is referring is talking about this black sand so why don't we just say why don't we just create a clause where we say which is made up of ground lava instead of coral instead of ground coral and shells it actually makes a connection in my brain a little bit clearer that that okay that what we're talking about made up of ground coral ground lava instead of ground coral and shells they're talking about they're talking about this black sand right over here so I definitely like this last choice the most