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Writing: Concision, style, and tone — Harder example 2

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my English instructor teaches Richard Wright's black boy is a masterful example of how an author writes to reveal the emotions of the story's protagonist all right that seems like a reasonable way to write it but let's look at the other choices my English instructor talks about black boy like it's the best book ever because the author writes to reveal the emotions of the story's protagonist well the tone here just seems too informal it's it might be how some folks talk but it isn't how you would necessarily want to write especially the rest of the sentence doesn't have that informal tone you say rights to reveal the emotions of the story's protagonist this right over here this part over here isn't an informal tone so it feels weird that the underlying part would be informal so I would rule I would rule this one out my English instructor can't get enough of Richard Wright's black boy because she thinks it's a sweet example of how an author writes to reveal the emotions of the story's protagonist so this one's this one feels even more informal so this was even more informal more informal you're saying because she thinks it's a sweet example she can't get enough of Richard Wright's book so this one I would definitely rule out that's that going even a more extreme see my English instructor revels in the exploration of race relations that Richard Wright employees in black boy because she luxury eights in an author who writes to reveal the emotions of the story's protagonist so this choice over here actually just feels too too official to too formal it's going in in the in the complete other direction and they're unnecessarily using fancy words your revels in the exploration of race relations that Richard Wright employees in black boy because she look jury eights in an author so that just seems a little bit over the top a little bit too formal so I would I would rule this out the best tone is actually what they have my English teacher teaches Richard Wright's black boy is a masterful example of how an author writes to reveal the emotions of the story's protagonist and I want to be clear any of these choices the grammar is not correct i uh.sorry the grammar isn't incorrect but it's more about tone here that we really just want to hit the tone that we're not too informal like these these two choices right over here like these two choices and not too formal or kind of 22 using too complex language or words or more complex than we need to so I actually like it the way the way that it's written