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Writing: Concision — Harder example

Writing: Grammar

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three-dimensional facial scans are being used to determine how well patients have aged in comparison to their peers so I actually like the word used it felt very clean I'm using only one word here and I was able to understand what it said three-dimensional facial scans are being used to determine how well patients have aged in comparison to their peers so actually like this so I'm I'm already inclined to no change but let's just look at the other choices and hopefully feel a little bit better why those would be bad choices three-dimensional facial scans are being usefully employed to determine how well patients have aged in comparison to their peers so usefully employed it's not really changing the meaning it's not giving us anything more and it's just more wordy it's it's a little it's a little bulky three-dimensional facial scans are being instead of saying are being used to determine we're saying are being usefully employed to determine well I could just say use this is more concise it's more clean if you can get the same meaning across and do it in a simpler way in a more concise way you should do it that way so I definitely don't like usefully employed three-dimensional facial scans are being put into action to determine how well patients have aged in comparison to their peers well put into action is another way of saying used and used is cleaner it is more concise and gets to the point while put into action put into action to determine how well it's just a little bit bulkier this wouldn't be you know if someone wrote this it's not like they committed some crime by writing put it are being put into action to determine but if I was editing that sentence I'd say well why don't you just replace that with used it's much simpler and cleaner easier to read three-dimensional facial scans are being employed and utilized once again this is this is a very bulky way of saying used and so what no need to add bulk to your sentences just to kind of I guess you know add more words three-dimensional facial scans are being used that's very nice and clean so oh I didn't I haven't answered the question that's an important part of it no change